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Disarm by ~DarkenedAbyss:iconDarkenedAbyss:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Experimental > Other


Synthetic scenarios suddenly surface
The mind makes mention to thoughts made believable
Bonds broken by bad influences
Secrets seem to sicken someone sympathetically
Dreams devoured by drastic delulsions
Long love lost in a haze of broken reality
An armament of anger supressed by bad memories
The craving to regain hope is a ripening necessity
Hold on tight for the ride of your life
let go now of the reasons to fight
Dont look now if you're afraid of the sight
Misery is something you just might like.
©2006-2009 ~DarkenedAbyss
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~noiamnot Jun 19, 2006, 1:42:41 AM
Wow. I like it. Short and intense. Love the description too ;) The 1st and 3rd stanzas seem a little forced, though.

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"A maiden running from a Prince?...
Does that make sense?!"
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~DarkenedAbyss Jun 19, 2006, 9:40:10 AM
Alot of my stuff is based on actual occurances in my life, almost a autobiography in poem form if you will. Alot of times this causes confusion to those reading for the first time. This is just a small peice of whats to come.

thanks for the critique.

Joe

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Francesca Kae Radosta
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*proto-synth Jun 20, 2006, 7:26:14 PM
"Synthetic scenarios suddenly surface
The mind makes mention to thoughts made believable
Bonds broken by bad influences
Secrets seem to sicken someone sympathetically"

you hit the nail on the head right there.

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"We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams."
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~DarkenedAbyss Jun 21, 2006, 10:24:12 AM
Dreams devoured by drastic delulsions
Long love lost in a haze of broken reality

this is my favorite part

fyi i wouldnt look too far into this, it wasnt meant to be related to by you. I am glad you feel you can relate to it though

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Francesca Kae Radosta
:iconproto-synth:
*proto-synth Jun 21, 2006, 11:22:32 AM
yeah, no i wasn't reading anything personal from that. shit, even if i were paranoid enough to extract some hidden attack towards me in there, my brain wouldn't have the energy to attempt to decode it these days.
those lines just struck me as a pretty 'to the point' call on things when I read it.

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"We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams."
:icondarkenedabyss:
~DarkenedAbyss Jun 21, 2006, 11:27:58 AM
well thats good

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Francesca Kae Radosta
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~girlinterrupted11 Jul 14, 2006, 1:23:27 PM
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Dont look now if you're afraid of the sight
Misery is something you just might like.
________________________________

i absolutely love that part..especially the last line i wish i came up with it myself.

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I am covered in skin; no one gets to come in.
:icondarkenedabyss:
~DarkenedAbyss Jul 14, 2006, 6:45:43 PM
thanks a lot

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Francesca Kae Radosta
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